A Failed Resurrection

wiltedSunflower

A Failed Resurrection

The flowers
are drunk and droopy
with sleep, sodden limp in deep
pails of water but with no thirst left
for a drink

 

 For dVerse

(Cinquain +1: 3.5.7.9.3) Remixed
from The Old Curiosity Shop

 

 

 

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21 thoughts on “A Failed Resurrection

  1. A couple of minor points; I think you mean pails … and you’re short a syllable in that line (changing to but no thirst overcomes that) … smiles. I’d be tempted to change The flowers to Sunflowers or Cut flowerstoo … but that’s really a matter of taste and style.

    Beyond that … I really like this.

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